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How do you all think of an English Competition?

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发表于 2004-11-6 19:41 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Hello everyone!
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) ?7 ~7 m% O# c- y5 `( |& s" zI haven't been on line for a week. It was really depressing. I can see our English Saloon is getting prosperous now!4 _- c0 s, E9 J" [
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I have been thinking whether we should hold a competition of English Composition? If we want to study English, the most important thing is to use it. Now matter how much we are trying to memorize or how many study tips we are learning, we can’t gain as much as when we actually use it as much as possible. I even thought about some subjects for us to talk about if some of us are interested.% j* s9 v8 z& f& N1 I: v  [

/ r7 K% W/ X7 m  n! K8 p8 ^Any thoughts on that? Connie, what do you think? Just a thought, no hard feelings.1 T3 }" |5 Z% ~7 M
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Wish you all the best!
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发表于 2004-11-6 20:26 | 显示全部楼层
Absolutely a great idea in my opinion , I hope more people can come here .
$ b7 ^; h+ M4 D7 y4 CPlease tell us whether it's a good idea to hold a competition of English Composition,  and if you don't mind please give us some suggestions:D :D
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发表于 2004-11-6 20:31 | 显示全部楼层

good idea

I agree on your proposal very much, and I think We badly need to improve our Writen English as well as spoken English as quick as possible.
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发表于 2004-11-7 09:02 | 显示全部楼层
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I can give out my homework every week as a topic, if you like. This week, the teacher asked us to write two paragraphs about the thought to the Remembrance day. my compostion lists as followed:
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: S1 I. h. [& {  B                                     The Remembrance Day
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, `4 x8 Q& |  O3 R: U- s       When I think about the Remembrance Day, the first thing coming to my mind is the poppy. Around the same day last year, I saw many people wearing small red flowers everywhere in the city. They looked so graceful, and remarkable red flowers intrigued me. What were they? Why were people wearing them? Just like the scene in the poem that we studied in the class last week, I asked a lady on the bus, “What is this flower?” The lady smiled, “This is the poppy.” And then she told me the history of the Remembrance Day. I fell into a deep meditation. 3 _" V# z! p. a
        Many people gave their lives as sacrifices for our present lives in peace. They were fathers, husbands, brothers, or sons. Although we don’t know their names, we should wear a poppy for them and pray that they have peaceful lives in heaven, without bombs, barbed wires, and screams.
$ }$ q/ I9 |8 i  F        I have watched some movies related wars. The bloody scenes shocked me. I couldn’t help asking myself, “Why do we fight each other?” Was it because of nation conflicts, the greed of minority, or our fatuities? In fact we are not completely in peace now. In Iraq, Palestine, and Africa, bullets are whizzing, and cities are in flames. Everyday some people die, and some day, can we see some people wearing poppies or something else for them?
7 W6 g( `) j5 R5 [  W/ p4 }- P! p        For the coming Remembrance Day, please wear a poppy for those who died in wars, and pray for the forever peace befalling on our distressful planet.
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Please correct me, if you like. It would be very nice for me.
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 楼主| 发表于 2004-11-7 12:53 | 显示全部楼层
Good writing there!
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发表于 2004-11-7 20:15 | 显示全部楼层
腐败写得真是不错!堪称精品!7 s5 u$ ]* v( Z3 i: E

+ |4 R0 J4 Z/ A+ F! L* W* u我过去对ESL抱有成见。今天见了腐败的作业,这种成见一扫而光。
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我以鸡蛋里挑骨头的态度,找出了两个实在算不上是毛病的毛病:
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+ o( S& R1 E3 }6 I, z$ b8 RThey looked so graceful, and remarkable red flowers intrigued me. 6 N+ c5 }8 ?2 u# l. P

. w' X8 K; m* x0 U8 x1 \and后面少了一个定冠词the。
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The Remembrance Day is coming, please wear a poppy……
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8 S8 t3 f1 G' F' B3 \9 q把逗号改成句号。
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发表于 2004-11-7 21:13 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
I am not very familiar with this topic! :P
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发表于 2004-11-7 21:38 | 显示全部楼层
Very good. & |; s; F, ]- A" W6 C2 `& F2 X

+ a! U+ ?: X0 F9 J1 z5 K       the first thing coming to=into my mind is the poppy.
0 ]7 A3 v9 Z1 b! h       I was deep into a meditation=I fell into a deep meditation.
& [5 Q7 T2 k' X& |  D( o. Y       I have watched some movies about war =the war or wars
) @, |0 }" O6 M. i4 }: c        “Why do we=people fight each other?”
. D( C9 v5 j* `! a! D        Were they because of .........=Was it because of ...
, i, u+ M3 ~/ k        we are not completely in peace now= we are not completely peaceful at present.  
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发表于 2004-11-7 21:43 | 显示全部楼层
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Originally posted by Wonton at 2004-11-7 11:15 PM:& x" Q0 H( ?! u9 d
腐败写得真是不错!堪称精品!
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我过去对ESL抱有成见。今天见了腐败的作业,这种成见一扫而光。' g' Q! Y$ {7 d
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我以鸡蛋里挑骨头的态度,找出了两个实在算不上是毛病的毛病:
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They looked so graceful, and remarkable  ...
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2 P6 p- e: M- G& q1 V6 b1 ABut, I am in LINC now. I think that LINC is very useful and helpful for me.
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thanks, everybody!0 ]7 _+ K) u6 \- Y" O
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[ Last edited by 将腐败进行到底 on 2004-11-8 at 12:46 AM ]
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发表于 2004-11-7 23:22 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Good job!
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发表于 2004-11-8 05:51 | 显示全部楼层
we are not completely in peace now= we are not completely peaceful at present
8 \- j9 H/ z$ o3 L) d& c- HIn my opinion,it's better if  this sentence is written in this way:  we are not completely at peace now.
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Because "at peace"  is the right phrase to express 处于和平时期
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发表于 2004-11-9 00:49 | 显示全部楼层

good job

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