我写了封雇主推荐信，能否帮忙改改，急用，谢谢！

冰镇风铃

雇主推荐信
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. E+ ^% E6 N0 w+ w9 w* J我作为XXX设计院的总工程师，非常荣幸的向您推荐TT先生。
TT先生自1999年7月大学毕业至2006年3月，在本设计院的土建室从事电力建筑设计工作，完成总计58个工程项目，并在这七年时间里从土建助理工程师到拥有和获聘为土建专业工程师。其七年来平均年薪为10万元人民币左右。
3 u- X) p. N, Z+ o" T1 R" o2 qTT先生他的日常工作职责为：
( ]$ M+ K) P' a) d; r  i- _' D9 y1、规划、设计110kV～220kV变电站的总平面布置；
2、设计110kV～220kV变电站建筑；
3、其它工业建筑用房及相应的配套民用房屋；
4、电力建筑工程项目的可行性调查研究及报告；
5、电力建筑工程项目的实施细则说明报告；
( @4 T( l/ f" S' N3 b6、建筑工程项目的初步设计、施工图和竣工图的主持设计以及绘制
7、电力建筑工地的技术支持及咨询服务；
0 G; ?9 q5 O1 v, l1 |. v8、建筑环保节能优化研究；
: L$ h3 D2 V8 ^! k, b# m4 n9、建筑新材料及新方法的可行性研究；
. T+ g. m" ~& N& n2 v( p4 n" {2 X10、建筑效果图的设计和绘制。
' H  _8 w1 W' e" u( ?上述职责TT先生均能独立、及时和圆满的完成。
0 A& o% V4 w2 r他本人还掌握了多种建筑设计绘图软件如AutoCAD，3DMAX/3DVIZ，Lightscape，SketchUp，ArchiCAD，Photoshop等和办公自动化常用软件如Word，Excel，PowerPoint等并取得相应的证书，确保了工作的高效准确的完成。
TT先生在本单位工作期间，表现出了其独特的思维模式及纯熟的工作水平，并且是个具有卓越的沟通能力尽职尽责和成熟易于相处并具有团队精神人。他主导编写的QC质量报告多次获得中国国家和广州市的一等奖。
他本人不但在工作上有突出的表现，而且在社会活动、体育运动多方面有广泛的发展，作为一个积极向上的青年，参与各种中国文化活动的努力另他成为一个积极乐观和强健体魄的人可以全面的开展工作和接受新的任务及挑战。
我相信他的动力、勤奋和具备的工作经验能够胜任贵公司的职责。希望我以上所言能帮您更多了解TT先生。如果您还有什么疑问，请与我联系，我很乐意回答您的任何问题。
: k) X1 D3 o4 k! u( NXXX设计院 总工程师 YY
联系方式：办公室电话：86-20-8888888
, w% o: w2 V8 j" ?, c手机：86-8888888
9 `1 M6 V  J( c2 p5 d9 H传真：86-20-8888888

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Letter of Reference
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8 S0 ^9 ]& M% h& s" n6 \, L0 ?To whom it may concern,
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* V/ Y) p+ t0 c+ J: uAs Chief engineer in XXX Institute by 1996, I am gratified to recommend Mr. TT who is applying for admission to your company.

Mr. TT has contributed extraordinarily in implementing his work in civil engineering department of XXX Institute, here, and I would like to recount his past efforts and accomplishments during his time from graduated from the university in July, 1999 to March, 2006 at this company. Mr. TT is engaged in the electric power building design, completes the grand total 58 engineering projects in the seven years, and attains Corresponding professional qualifications that are included from assistant engineer to construction engineer. For the outstanding performance, his average yearly salary in the seven years is about 100,000 Yuan.

The routine work undertook by Mr. TT are:
1． Planning and designing the general layout plan of 110kV ~ 220kV transformer substation；
" e0 @! w$ {  o: a! S8 @2． 110kV ~ 220kV transformer substation architectural design；
3． All kinds of industry building and corresponding civil building；
4． Feasibility investigation, study and report of architectural part in electric power engineering project；
5． Implementary detailed rules report of architectural part in electric power engineering project；
6． Masterminding and drawing conceptual design drawing, shop drawing and as-built drawing of buildings；
7． The technical support and the counseling for projects of electric power constructions;
0 P; t9 X% s+ g+ b8． The study of Green construction;
9． Inspecting new energy conservation structural materials；
3 F. `$ M  h+ j  s" ~1 \2 j10．Drawing 3D emulational buildings；
Mr. TT can achieve these works independently, timely and perfectly.
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- [6 J3 z1 E" R6 i. c: u. w& fTo ensure the work efficiently and accurately completed, he also grasped various architectural software such as AutoCAD, 3DMAX/3DVIZ, Lightscape, SketchUp, ArchiCAD, Photoshop and so on, and office automation software for instance Word, Excel, PowerPoint etc, and obtained the corresponding certificates.

Mr. TT showed his unique style of thought pattern and skillful work in the team. His performance from the first projects has proven his a conscientious, cheerful person with excellent communication skills. The character of mature and easy-going, a very good team worker in various project implementations makes him led a team won a lot of regional and national awards about the report on Quality Control.
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Besides his work achievements, Mr. TT has a passion for sports, social activities. As an active young man, he also delighted himself by all kinds of Chinese cultures cultivated him to a enterprising personality and an optimistic attitude, constructed him a fit body, healthy enough to tackle challenges successfully.
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6 _$ p' k  \" |: _I believe he has motivation, diligence and the necessary experience to ensure his success on your company. Therefore, I recommend him enthusiastically. If you need any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.

) l; X* t* u/ L- u& a* m& FSincerely yours,

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XXX Institute.
' N- K- Z$ W/ I, c' s  }4 Z6 R7 fOffice TEL. 86-20-88888888
( n- @3 A, m2 uCell Phone： 86-20-88888888
Fax： 86-20-88888888

八千里路云和月

恩，感觉不错。

: i4 ^! p6 G& H请其他高人帮忙出意见，希望能改得更好啊！

dogyear

As Chief engineer in XXX Institute by 1996, I am gratified to recommend Mr. TT who is applying for admission to your company.
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5 N; L9 W, [' a2 i- k7 c6 j这个词的用法应当改。who is applying for XXXX position at your company.

dogyear

Mr. TT has contributed extraordinarily in implementing his work in civil engineering department of XXX Institute, here, and I would like to recount his past efforts and accomplishments during his time from graduated from the university in July, 1999 to March, 2006 at this company.
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8 M& L: f4 a; D2 }9 E; n(1) during his employment with the institute from his university graduation in July, 1999 to March, 2006.  
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( X0 Y; Q$ H2 _0 ]3 q% E* @# s(2) Is it "a company" or "an institute"???

dogyear

For the outstanding performance, his average yearly salary in the seven years is about 100,000 Yuan.

(1) As the reward of the outstanding performance, ...
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(2) his average annual salary in past seven years was ...
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(3) in the past seven years, his average salary was about xxxx per year.

dogyear

原帖由 冰镇风铃 于 2006-4-9 19:34 发表
: [% k- t0 I5 x7 h: X' F& Ydogyear，谢谢你的批改，但雇主信很难确定你会选择哪个具体的职位，所以我没有在这里写 XXXX position

is applying for admission to your company.
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) E  E# G) j5 v4 L2 E1 \1 ^4 Z1 G5 `如果职位还没有准，也可以说 is seeking for employment with your company (business).

angela77

kan kan ~~~~~~~~~

chun

I have worked for more than 5 employers here. none of them have asked this letter. They just want talk to your reference.
In Canada, do you think your employer will recommand you to another employer. One exception is this company is bankrupted.
Only my personal opinion, please do what you think is correct.

星雨心愿

上WORKSHOP 时老师也这么说，雇主打电话的多一些，要信的少一些 ，还有发 REFERENCE 问卷的，
那么请问 CHUN, 你的5个雇主有几个 打电话给你的 REFERENCE  了呢？ 俺想了解一下这个概率，谢谢

Upland

其中两个是当时的同事，HR打电话问的很详细，每一项要求给打分。另一个在新加坡，HR发去了邮件。我同事给的评价不错，但有高有低，比较符合实际。不过新雇主的HR说他们的评价很好。