In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

; l, ?$ t" s$ O+ @In the garden of my heart
2 v3 e( T& p2 t. o7 ^% XYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
* U! o4 M5 ?3 j8 T. d) SThrough darkness to light
% [4 S; a) y: nNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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- k2 K1 L8 @8 H0 mIn the memory of my life
- V$ ?4 H( ^" NYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
0 q1 u/ M4 d' {5 a* I) bMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
# o# K. v2 z. L3 a7 L* x3 O/ OBursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
$ v  |. O1 j$ ~: DFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
. z8 b1 ]+ Q( Y$ z# m3 ^Devoured my so ...

* Q" m0 ^4 P9 d3 Q+ X; F& B/ N' z眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。

3 s1 k9 Z; v. h/ |* ~! n加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
7 U9 Q4 V* b4 I: S# ^眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
$ m( P( c8 l# B# |; D& y写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
1 [+ j5 A; H) n& {( jShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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3 \) V! ]8 J2 |Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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- a( b: p. A; y' D* g! Q! g2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
- b- O7 E4 }2 Pthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

: p; Q. O1 S* c% }Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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: W, g3 \6 @. f诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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; v2 w, C) y* Q# nShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

1 L# F$ u6 D' l* b: zDon't weep at my grave
6 h, G+ \$ o$ e; F4 NFor I am not there,
$ x6 H2 X9 ^2 J! ~; y9 ~I've a date with a butterfly
+ g4 s& l$ h- b  D( [3 MTo dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
. V/ e% U2 R. d2 o7 HI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
* a+ m& R1 }- M6 r7 a* Z+ t( GRight next to you.

Don't be sad
& u# y* K( y7 K" dWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
8 s& l9 Y$ T' W0 S. j& P6 P$ \* _1 LWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
+ G# H. K) P; _9 @" nPlaying tag with the wind,
+ X- \0 t6 Y+ `6 Q# {Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
* e* g1 [2 {; o2 C9 H( Z% D# A7 R( zSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
) J& m& ~* o" f9 NWhile I'm waiting for thee.